Tenchi Muyo Random Snippets

 

As promised, the random snippetness of my really awful writing over the past year. These all got discarded for one reason or another. But I’m a sucker for punishment and criticism and some brave folk said they wanted to see them. So, in effect, here they are:


Replaced scenarios – the original “beta”

The following are all snippets of scenes that might have made it into the story but I found a different or a better way to do it. They were all written at random, some of them with a specific story in mind and others not. This is the outtakes section, really!!

Outtake 1: Kane Kyoda discovers Tenchi’s secret

Outtake 2: A scene from the Dying Tree involving Tenchi, Ryoko, Nozomi and the gems

Outtake 3: Kiyone returns to the Tennan Estate

 


Tales from Oblivion: The story segments that never were!

The following are major edits made to story parts, or are bits of stories begun but not finished for whatever reason. I’m cringing as I write this. Really. :S These are the bits that Washu threw into subspace. You can decide for yourselves whether or not you think they should’ve been left there…


Hawk of Jurai

The original beginning to the Hawk of Jurai story, with a different introduction for Seiryo (much suckier, I warn you). Some of these chapters did get kept for the final story…but Seiryo’s introduction/involvement was changed rather drastically! The original title for this story was False Goddess. But I thought it sucked so I changed it. (I was then later asked why, because Hawk of Jurai didn’t seem to make sense. Am I the only one then who associates the Light Hawk Wings with an actual bird…and Tsunami with the hawk??)

Chapters one and two
Random scene: Discussing Seiryo

Kindred : The original opening/plan

Actually I think this version of Kindred would have worked well in some ways. But I just didn’t have the time to think it all out logistically. The real risk of it clashing with After the Rain was also ever-present, although I’m really sorry that I had to drop this where I did. In truth a lot of real life things were also going on when I wrote this story – and I couldn’t devote enough brainpower to it to make it all work how I wanted even though I badly wanted to use Washu and her past to greater effect. I’m especially sorry that I didn’t manage to use the flashback scene with Washu’s hearing and Manami Kurashida. But in the end I couldn’t find a way to do so :S
Z’s original fic incarnation was going to be a little bit different – in the end this was just a step too far. However, for as much as I wrote…here you go. As with Hawk of Jurai, there were bits and pieces of this salvaged for the eventual story Kindred. Originally however this story was going to be called “Codename Ryoko” and then, (as the title appears in this draft) – “Halcyon”.
Chapter One
Chapter Two

Chapter Three

Chapter Four

Chapter Five

Chapter Six

Ryoko and Z – random scene

Original (very rough and unedited) Story Plan: Halcyon/Codename Ryoko

 

Jurai’s Hope: The Epilogue/Nozomi Story
Jurai no Nozomi

This one will tease and annoy up to the sky, since there’s no way it can be finished now in its current form. This is largely because it was begun as an epilogue to Demon’s Exile and the subsequent stories mean that continuity for it no longer works. I may yet write the story I had in mind for Tenchi, Ryoko, Nozomi and Shigure et al. But the chances are that I won’t. Even so, this is the only appearance for Ayeka’s son Shigure in anything I’ve written. (There’s also some cute Ryoko/Tenchi stuff in here, imo!). Nozomi is a special character to me although I’m not quite sure why…;)

Chapter One

Chapter Two
Chapter Three

Chapter Four

Chapter Five

Chapter Six

Chapter Seven

Chapter Eight

Snippet: Nozomi and Kae-chan

Snippet: Nozomi and Ryoko flashback (uncut)

Snippet: Nozomi and Tsunami-no-ki

Snippet: Nozomi and Washu flashback

Snippet: Nozomi and Prince Haru

Snippet: Shigure and Nozomi – marooned (1)

Snippet: Shigure and Nozomi – marooned (2)

Snippet: Nozomi tells Hanako

Snippet: Tenchi and Kamidake flashback


After The Rain: Part Three

I thought about writing a part three for this but never got around to it. In truth I had a lot of snippets and ideas for it but I wasn’t sure how to tie it together as regards timeline and continuity. It was possible – however difficult to do in context with stories like Eagle’s Prayer and Hawk of Jurai. So in the end, many of these got ditched. However, I’ll load them here. Some of these things, although never actively written about in any of the stories are alluded to – such as Clay’s meeting with Tokimi. ;)
Chapter One

Chapter Two

Snippet: Clay meets Tokimi

Snippet: Washu is Poisoned
Snippet: Kagato vs Aiko

Snippet: Aiko’s Confession

Snippet: The Death Of A Princess

Snippet: The planned final ending for After the Rain (Ryoko)

 

 

Random snippets – story ideas I liked but never had the occasion to use.

 

Sasami and Kamidake
This scene was written about the Princess and her knight when Sasami reached eighteen. I just thought it was cute. There was never anywhere to use it in a story, but it was fun nonetheless J

 

Kiyone’s family

I was originally planning to write a story about Kiyone and her family after the events of Hawk of Jurai. In the end, her post traumatic issues fit well into Demon’s Exile instead and I didn’t want to throw too many OCs into the blaze at once. I did, however, have a lot thought out for Kiyone’s family – and for what might happen if she ever brought Seiryo home.

There was also a plan at one point to write a SeiKiyo story beyond the end of Operation Eradicate’s events, involving pirates, Seiryo being an ass and Kiyone trying to work out what to do with a Juraian marriage proposal. Some of the incidents mentioned in these snippets relate directly to that story plan, which has probably been ditched (probably). I’m not posting all of those relevant snippets here, though.

Just in case!!

Kiyone’s Family: The rough outline

Snippet: Seiryo meets Kiyone’s family

Snippet: Seiryo and Mashisu

 

 

Well, there you have it. The dregs of my flashdisk and the rubbish I store on it that doesn’t make it into a story :S


Comments, complaints, jeers and criticisms to royaume_uni@blueyonder.co.uk

:D

 

Disclaimer

 

All snippets posted were written by VraieEsprit between August 06 and October 07t. Copyright on original non-Tenchi characters ,original story concepts and entirely on the writing style belong to VraieEsprit (E A Woolley) as of August 2006. In particular, Nozomi Masaki Jurai and Shigure Imada Jurai are the creations of VraieEsprit and are not to be reproduced without prior permission.

Tenchi Muyou, its characters, concept and basic design is the copyright of Kajishima Masaki-san.

 

9th October 2007